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K Lohr's avatar

What a beautiful and poignant piece of writing. The novel will be welcomed in literary circles as well as generally. Thank you.

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Temi Mattu's avatar

Thank you so much...I trust your comment will happen someday

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Grace's avatar

This piece is so enthralling. I look forward to reading the full work . Welldone.

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James Don BlueWolf's avatar

Wonderful, poignant and fulfilling read.

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Temi Mattu's avatar

Thanks

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Temi Mattu's avatar

Thanks all...I'm grateful for the feedback

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Lillian Sheriff's avatar

I read through the whole thing.

The storyline is deffinately one that many will be able to connect to. Especially with everything being exposed.

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Joseph L. Wiess's avatar

A Nubian Beauty arose in Edo State

A woman of such glory that all must have

The Silent lover never made a sound

Until he came, stealing her heart

Bringing cries of ecstasy from her lips

Until, against all reason she fell in love

And became with child.

Then in his eyes, the Forze Speciale

had dimmed to the norm

and with a child, he left her

all alone, until at last

she gave her last breath,

Delivering a single perfect nymph

in her place.

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This is a great start to a promising story, one that I hope you continue to work on.

At first, I confused Edo state with Edo Province and thought this was taking place in Japan

And the references to Italy only added to it, until I looked up Edo State

I was tempted to make reference to a water spirit, and did.

Thank you so very much for letting us read this.

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